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Apr 21, 2011
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walking to the corner store
I saw a girl
she smiled at me
I felt good
she was pretty
a sweet simple gesture
high-lighting a day
you've heard the expression
"high on life"
think I've discovered
the active ingredient
...a sweet simple gesture
don't bogart the buzz
pass it around
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— brittle light, Apr 21, 2011
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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scribbler
15 years 1 month ago
hello
a simple write describing one of life's simple pleasures. Also very, very enjoyable...............scribbler
brittle light
15 years 1 month ago
I hope "simple" isn't seen
I hope "simple" isn't seen simply as fluff....fluff may be simple, not all that is simple is fluff....and if this is perceived as too fluffy, that's ok . I have many guilty fluffy pleasures myself, and though I may be wrong, I think most people do.
I thank you for not dismissing this out of hand because of the fluff factor.
"fluffle on, merry poets,
we are all multi- dimensional
don't keep secret
what we already know"
scribbler
15 years 1 month ago
hi
simple is a good thing in this instance. To have gone any other way would have lessened the honesty of the moment................stan
CCfire
15 years 1 month ago
Some things just are...and if
Some things just are...and if it made you smile then that's the best part of it, this post made me smile. Restores a little faith in humanity when you give nice you get nice back :)