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lou

Apr 06, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Miasma

Sensuous orb warms my skin
causing a smile.
Peaceful and sanguine

Light lingers throughout the morning.
lunchtime arrives,
life remains pleasurable.

Flat grey clouds weave
thier way and intersperse,
between the puffy white.
In a late afternoon miasma .

Night fall swallows luminous day
the moon’s distant pale,
invades .

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

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Comments

15 years ago

Shirl

Thank you very much.

Love Lou

15 years ago

Lou

I love the refers to the moon and sun in this
its truly well done
Eddie C.

This stanza made me keeping reading;
"Sensuous orb warms my skin
Causing a smile
Peaceful and sanguine"

15 years ago

Eddie

Thank you, much appreciated.

Lou

15 years ago

Ian

thank you, it was a lovely weekend it was mother's day and the whole family went out for dinner.

lou

15 years ago

Xena

Thank you, I always have a problem with which words are all one word LOL !!

love lou

15 years ago

Xena

thanks

lou

15 years ago

Dear Lou,

I like your title! The poem flows well and gives off good feelings all around. I like the same lines as Eddie C. Keep up the good work!

love, Cat

15 years ago

Thanks

Cat,

Thank you very much.

Love Lou

TheUnknownAuthor

TheUnknownAuthor

14 years 11 months ago

Pleasure to meet you

And it's thanks to my fascination with the word "miasma" at the moment that I stumbled upon this. I think one may call that serendipity, which I also have a fascination with.

But anyway, and without too many words. It's astonishing how perfectly someone else can describe your emotions about a day, or particular moments in them. You do so tranquilly, and with no heavy-weighted words to change the tone from anything other than elegant.
Thank you for this.

Yours

Waldo

14 years 11 months ago

Hi Waldo

It's a pleasure to meet you as well. I love to find new words to express myself with, I'm really pleased that you enjoyed this poem.

Louise