Sixty-Something

Assembled over the years,
I was pieced together by many things.
Among them, wounds that pierced me
without blood, but disfigured me for a time.

Scars and abrasions remain,
from loss and from love.
If I’m fortunate though,
another compress will be within reach,
ready to be applied, when needed,
by my experienced hands.

— Michael Anthony, Feb 23, 2023

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

Critiques

Seren

3 years 3 months ago

Dear Michael

A poem that all can find a little of themselves in, especially as we age, resilience and always going forward is all we can do while carrying the burdens of life.

I really loved this one I see nothing that needs to be changed.

Really well done!

Kind Regards Seren

Michael Anthony

3 years 3 months ago

Thank you Seren! Glad you

Thank you Seren! Glad you liked it and I really appreciate you taking the time to stop by. I tweaked it a bit per Lavender's excellent suggetsion. Hopefully it worked.

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Lavender

3 years 3 months ago

Hi, Michael,
This causes me to pause and take inventory of my life - sometimes it feels very short, and other times if feels as if I've been around a thousand years. So much loss and love as your poem gently reveals. I wonder about the word "hand" being so close to the beautiful image of "experienced hands." Stood out just a bit to me. I am also sixty-something, and I sure appreciate your poem.
L

Michael Anthony

3 years 3 months ago

Thank you for your suggestion

Thank you for your suggestion L! I do have a terrible habit of repeating words in my poems (to my everlasting annoyance with myself - lol!). I have edited it with, perhaps, a better line - hopefully...

FYI - One of the best features of this online community is the collabrative support from others - awesome!

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