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RoseBlack
RoseBlack
Jan 21, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Black Flag

Poison words
Flowing from your tongue
My name must taste good
In every song you've sung

Pull a dagger, Bitch
Then I'll pull a sword
The time has come
You're not the adored

Hide and seek
A little too late
No one likes ugly
Time to meet fate

Run, run
As fast as you can
Don't worry, I'll catch you
I'm the bitchilante hitman

— RoseBlack, Jan 21, 2023

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, Jim Morrison

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Critiques

Seren

Seren

3 years 4 months ago

Dear RoseBlack

Well I promise not to piss you off. This has venom and it's really well written. I wrote a poem called Judas Kiss it's here on the site I think. It's something like this. Well done. Your pen has a sting!!! I love it.

I can't see anything I'd change but I'm overtired I'll take another look when I come back this afternoon my time. Sun's up I've been up all night writing. It's all good I only get 3hrs sleep most nights.

Kind regards J x

P.s. I think that title is perfect.

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

3 years 4 months ago

Thank you

For your high praise! Writing is a release for me and I think I am learning how to structure it instead of letting it all spill out. I will check out your poem for sure! Thanks again.

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

3 years 4 months ago

dear Carrie,

you have honed the energy of your anger into a fine weapon that only fits your hand! I love it all!

*hugs, Cat
much enjoyed, eddy styx

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

3 years 4 months ago

Thank you Cat

Surprisingly this was not directed at a male....but it felt good to get off my chest!!! Thank you for your comment.

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

3 years 4 months ago

dear Carrie,

the who does not matter. the important thing is feeling good after blowing of steam ;) Cat

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

3 years 4 months ago

Thank you

Metal as fk right!!! I think I was almost growling at the end...it takes a lot to make my temper come out and this person hit the right nerve.