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Jun 29, 2022
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Sinister
I am evil and I like it and I especially like to torment you emotionally. For you see...then it is harder for you to fight back, and I have more control over you. I am your worst nightmare and I have been around all your life. From the time you were born up until now. I will not leave you alone and I will do all I can to make you miserable.
I want you dead, but you will not oblige me. So, I will torture you in every way I can think of and I have many ways and I have to say they work very well.
When I hear you cry and ask God why!? I laugh at you and God too. I know you hate, me but I laugh at you because you are so, weak and I can control you very easily.
It makes me mad when you refuse to give into my evil ways and demands.
I am the one who has caused all the problems in your life. The lies, molestation and rape? All of those I planned for you. It is fun to hear you cry out in pain and sorrow.
I have caused all your friends to turn away from you. I caused you to think people were friends when they were really enemies/false friends.
I tried to get you to commit suicide, but God prevented you from doing so. I hate God for doing that.
I want you to go to hell with me but if I cannot have you there, I will make your life a living hell. So, far I have done that, and I have had lots of fun causing you pain.
I love to hear you blame God for all the hell I have put you through.
Ha, ha, ha!!!
About This Poem
Last Few Words: When I wrote this, I did not realize what kind of person it was about except that the person was evil through and through. But since I have read it through several times I have come to the conclusion it is about Narcissists.
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
3 years 4 months ago
Yes...
a Narcissist would believe that it was about them! After all, there is no one as important as they!
I like your twisted sense of humor. There is a lot to be said for having faith, but I beware of having too much faith in anything
that is touched by the human race. I make fun of anything and everything; yet I have respect for the things that seem good.
There are the basic precepts of religion, that are good, but it is open to interpretation and that's where things can go wrong.
Look at the format that is 3-4 or 5 lines, like verses and see if they don't make it easier to read.
I hope that we see more of what you have to say, keep writing! ! Geezer.
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Candlewitch
3 years 4 months ago
hello marie,
I was just looking at your biography. is MN Minnesota or Montana? I ask, because I live in Wisconsin, a stones throw from the Minnesota/Wisconsin border. I have a Male alter ego who writes dark poetry; his name is eddy styx. we both are glad to meet you! welcome to Neopoet.
i think that you are an excellent for developing an alter ego, too. you have all the makings of one! you just need to find a good name to go by. this poem is marvelously congaing all the elements for debauchery, lol. my favorite lines are:
When I hear you cry and ask God why!? I laugh at you and God too. I know you hate, me but I laugh at you because you are so, weak and I can control you very easily.
*smiles ;) eddy & Cat