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Christopher Stuart
Christopher Stuart
Apr 06, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

WOMAN.

Be kind to woman
that we never leave
from the cradle
to the grave
will lay us down
to sleep
because of her
we breathe.

— Christopher Stuart, Apr 06, 2022

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: Australia, AUS

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Geezer

Geezer

4 years 2 months ago

I like the premise...

but there seems to be a break in the middle
that no matter how I read it, it does not seem that there is a way
to make the transition from the line; "the cradle to the grave" to
"will lay us down to sleep". I'm sure that you had something in mind,
but it has been lost. ~ Geezer.
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