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Lovely Afternoon

She sits at the table
working on a puzzle
I rise from my chair
to pour us some wine

She suddenly asks me
if I might ever come up to her
and tell her I no longer want her

(this happened to a character
in a book she's been reading)

My brief pause causes her
more angst than she can
comfortably carry without
the help of my answer

I tell her I want to stay
as long as the nights
keep chasing after the days

She smiles and sips her wine
and places another piece
in her puzzle

— Michael Anthony, Oct 20, 2021

About This Poem

Last Few Words: A simple poem trying to capture an idyllic fall afternoon. The light through the windows, some music, and the wine, of course.

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Critiques

Geezer

Geezer

4 years 7 months ago

No crits...

and adding my thoughts to it will just take away from a beautiful afternoon. ~ Geez.
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