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scribbler
Sep 23, 2021 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

TALE OF LEAVES

Yet another year
dimples the surface of our lives
to float slowly down
and add to the detritus
of time.

— scribbler, Sep 23, 2021

About This Poem

Last Few Words: So here I go trying two things I don't do much of : brevity and free verse

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Critiques

Ray Whitaker

Ray Whitaker

4 years 8 months ago

Strong!

Short and powerful.
Wish I could write short stuff that was this powerful

S

scribbler

4 years 8 months ago

Hi Ray

Most of my stuff is fairly long. But once in a while to see if I can,I write something short. I am pleased you think well of this one

Obadiah Grey

Obadiah Grey

4 years 8 months ago

I like the title, and, indeed

I like the title, and, indeed the piece itself,
especially knowing your strong ties to nature that is evident from your book.

Difficult to pull of 'brevity" with a poetic bent,
but I think you've managed it!!

Obi.

S

scribbler

4 years 8 months ago

Hi Obi

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment

lovedly

lovedly

4 years 8 months ago

As we age ----teeth if any// wobble

most sing as they compose
what would you stan I wonder

never mind me
I can't hear either
still i want to know what is
detritus
too lazy to open the thesaurus
do scribble here

S

scribbler

4 years 8 months ago

Loose particles which result

Loose particles which result fro disintegration. When referring to leaves it can also be called duff. First time I ever used the word in a poem lol. So you can go ahead and get your lazy bones in bed lol