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VanRyan
VanRyan
Dec 22, 2020 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Thoughts Adrift

My thoughts
Rise from the shore;
Again, as before,

They cross the bay,
Seek out a crest
And come to rest.

One gull
Glides into view—
Could it be you

Searching
The misty sea
For me?

You turn away
Into the haze,
Uncertain
As always.

— VanRyan, Dec 22, 2020

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

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Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: Arizona, USA

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Critiques

Asche Keegan

Asche Keegan

5 years 5 months ago

Dear VanRyan

Those last three stanzas hit home. Amazing job! I really like the rhythm you use, and I feel like you perfectly captured longing and loneliness.

VanRyan

VanRyan

5 years 5 months ago

Dear Ms. Kareyn;

thank you so very much for liking my little poem. No, lonely I am not; I am simply a chameleon, well versed in changing my appearance--figuratively, of course. I appreciate your kind comment . Van.

VanRyan

VanRyan

5 years 5 months ago

Hello, Ms. Lavender

I wish to thank you very much for your thoughtfully expressed comment. Thank you. Van (aka Jerry)

VanRyan

VanRyan

5 years 5 months ago

Thanks Lovedly,

but actually I'm a libra chameleon. Nevertheless, I appreciate your comment.
Van