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c lynn brooks
Jun 10, 2020 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Mother's Prayer

Bless the union of these souls
as they become whole

A myriad of thoughts run through my head
as I watch my young one being wed

Through a veil of tears I do recall
there was a time when you were so small

Here you stand taking your vows
so many years has brought you to now

To Travis I give my precious one
it is with pride I now call you son

A lifetime of love I wish for you
years of happiness for you too

A union that should never grow old
forever is circled in bands of gold

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I wrote this for my daughter who will be married on 20June 2020

Review Request Intensity: Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: north carolina usa, USA

Favorite Poets: Leonard Cohen, Edgar Alan Poe, ray Bradbury, John Grissom, .Alan S Jeeves James patterson,

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c lynn brooks

5 years 10 months ago

Teddy

thank you I am so happy for her he is a wonderful young man

Lavender

Lavender

5 years 10 months ago

Mother's Prayer

Hello, Chrys,
This is very special. Not certain if it was intentional, but 'veil of tears' connected me even closer to your relationship with your daughter - soon to be bride. Congratulations on a very precious and monumental event!
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c lynn brooks

5 years 10 months ago

Lavender

Thank you my daughter and I have a very close relationship which I am so thankful for

Rula

Rula

5 years 10 months ago

The man in

Command is absolutely lucky to have you as a mother in low Gracy. May your ink ever flow with love dear
Congrats to you all.

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c lynn brooks

5 years 10 months ago

Rula

minor correction it is I that is gaining a son in law not Gracy

Rula

Rula

5 years 10 months ago

Oops

sorry dear Chrys

Geezer

Geezer

5 years 10 months ago

I'm thinking...

that your son-in-law is lucky to have a great mother-in-law. Giving your children to someone else's care, is a great thing when you know that they are good people. My only crit. is that I think that you should have said; "years of happiness for you [two]."
Gee.
.

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c lynn brooks

5 years 10 months ago

Gee

Thank you
I meant too as in also but also didn't sound correct

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tyro

5 years 10 months ago

very touching and very

very touching and very sentimental I loved it, and what touched me most is the honesty of the feeling. The first couplet I found the most powerful of the poem. A sweet heartfelt write.