Widowhood

sometimes she lies still
simply trying to gather
whatever remains

— Lavender, May 06, 2020

About This Poem

Last Few Words: An attempt in Senryu. Thank you.

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: I tend to read Ted Kooser, Jim Harrison, Billy Collins, Paul Simon, Robert Frost. I like minimalist poetry, and poems reflecting on nature and Mother Earth.

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Critiques

c lynn brooks

6 years 1 month ago

lavender

yes this is true , however there is so much more to it. Try expanding this poem

Lavender

6 years 1 month ago

Hello!

Hello! I appreciate your reading, and I will consider your suggestion.
Thank you!
Lavender

scribbler

6 years 1 month ago

I try

to not even think about a life after Susan. I think this Haiku is a lot said in a few words

Lavender

6 years 1 month ago

Hello, Scribbler,
My husband passed almost 11 years ago. I wrote a lot of poetry around that time, mostly pretty private stuff and much of it without shape or form. Through the years, my thoughts have settled, and it seems the core and marrow of my feelings don't need too many words. Thank you for your thoughts!
L