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Pandora's Box

One day fat old Mr Knox
Sunbathed on some Grecian rocks;
Pandora swam by, nude,
Which was rather rude:
So he photographed her box.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
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Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: London, Culture Capital of the World

Favorite Poets: Siegfried Sassoon, Wilfred Owen, Rupert Brooke, Chaucer, Shakespeare to name but a few. And VERY IMPORTANTLY: Erich Fried, a leftwing Austrian of Jewish ancestry who fled the Nazis and became a British citizen in 1949., And, other writers (non-poets mainly): Raymond Chandler, Irvine Welsh, Anthony Burgess, Graham Greene, Charles Bukowski, John le Carré, Anthony Horowitz, Mick Herron, Margaret Attwood, Edna O'Brian, Maeve Binchy., Writers who I find vastly over-rated: TS Eliot, Virgina Woolf, Sylvia Plath, Phil Larkin, E.A. Poe, A. Ginsburg, Longfellow, Gerald Manley Hopkins (actually I LOATHE Hopkins more than damson-dappled words can say).

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

5 years 7 months ago

Waving to the nude...

1] So he shot Pandora's box
2] So he photographed her box
3] He photoed Pandora's box
4] Rather than use rude, I would say lewd
I know photoed isn't a word, but people will know what you mean right away.
~ Geezer.
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Edna Sweetlove

Edna Sweetlove

5 years 7 months ago

Dear Geezer

Thank you fore your comments. Nos 1 & 2 I shall adopt and have amended the rest of the text accordingly. I have moved the "edit" stage accordingly!
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scribbler

5 years 7 months ago

Hmmmmm

Why take a picture of some old wooden box? he asks with wide eyed innocence? In line 2 try replacing on with upon.Line 3 try pale and nude. Just some thoughts

Edna Sweetlove

Edna Sweetlove

5 years 7 months ago

Thank you.

Maybe he was into wood...

Gracy

Gracy

5 years 7 months ago

Very good, Edna, I only think

Very good, Edna, I only think you should change to the lewd word, as somebody else already said. A good laugh, tx!

Edna Sweetlove

Edna Sweetlove

5 years 7 months ago

Thanks...

...not convinced unless someone can say why "lewd" is better - yes, it rhymes better with "nude". But the rude meaning is preferable - but I am ready to be persuaded.
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Geezer

Geezer

5 years 7 months ago

I just don't

see you using the word rude as it should be used. rude: crude, gross, gruff, harsh, rough, coarse, rugged, boorish, uncivil, uncouth, impolite, insolent. After all, he was photographing her and he didn't seem to be offended. Lewd suggests that although it may not be proper, it wasn't anything but, titillating. ~ Geezer.
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Edna Sweetlove

Edna Sweetlove

5 years 7 months ago

Rude...

...In Britain we often use "rude" in a slightly different way: in the sense of "naughty"/"cheeky"/"impudent".
Also I use "lewd" to mean "disgracefully and openly sexual".
e.g.
"The perverted exhibitionist made several lewd, thrusting movements with his pelvis, which Little Emma thought was a little bit rude, so she kicked him in the goolies."
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Edna Sweetlove

Edna Sweetlove

5 years 7 months ago

"Fries" v. Chips

I can't really accept the Greek claim.

Potatoes cut up into slices or other shapes and then fried in either oil or fat are pretty ubiquitous - it's the shape of the fried bits which differentiates..

In Britain and Ireland, the traditional "chip" is usually about 2-3 inches long and cut c.1/2" x 1/2". In fish and chip shops it's normally fried in cheap oil and is both soggy and horrible. In restaurants it might be fried in beef dripping and hand-cut, but more often still in oil. In Britain, the term "fried potatoes" would normally imply SLICED but not chipped potatoes,

In France, "pommes frites" are cut much narrower, maybe 1/4" x 1/4". It is this style of chip which is known as "French fries" by Americans I believe. In France and Belgium, pommes frites are always CRISP and DRY and never wet or soggy. A "friterie" is a mobile chip wagon which sells nothing but pommes frites! And in Belgium and Holland they are usually served with mayonnaise on top.

In Germany, the same style of French chips is known as "pommes" (pron. POM-mez). This is to differentiate them from traditional German fried potatoes which are usually fried together with either onions and/or bits of ham and are known as Bratkartoffeln.

In France and in more upmarket British restaurants, Bratkartoffeln (without the extra ham and with onions as an optional ingredient) are normally known as "pommes sautées".

I associate Greek potatoes more as sliced or chopped ones roasted or baked for a long time in olive oil. Yummy.

Edna loves a good chip.
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