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Fledgling flight.

When her flight clicks to a shut
Worm clutched
The chorus begins, that pronounces:
“Bring it in, in bring in!”
I am the more worthy,
I am the greater to sing
Out of this cacophony of chirrups
To me, to ME, you bring!

Survival is by numbers,
And those that sing their loudest worth;
Gain the fatter worms
Drawn out of the earth,
Arched across the sky in
A perpetual evolutionary flight,
By those who will soon outlive
Their wings.

And the young shall continue,
All a clatter clinking flutter,
Edging out into the morning light
We may capture them, if early,
In their fledgling flight,
And the earnest process again, begins.

— vandiemenspeak, Oct 24, 2018

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Observing a constant returning, patient, feeding starling.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Tasmania, AUS

Favorite Poets: Glen Richards, Thomas Hardy, Phillip Larkin, Robert Frost, William Carlos Williams, Carol Ann Duffy , Ani DiFranco, Seamus Heaney, Emily Dickinson, T. S. Elliot

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Critiques

IRiz

IRiz

7 years 7 months ago

Strong and shocking lines.

Strong and shocking lines.
I like the image of those who outlived their wings.
It breaks my heart to imagine.

vandiemenspeak

vandiemenspeak

7 years 7 months ago

Thanks IRiz

They are actually nesting above my makeshift laundry! I try not to disturb them when they're active, which makes laundry a bit of a challenge. There are a profusion of birds that live around the little hut. Thanks for reading and seeing in all senses.

Cheers

Chris.

zebra

zebra

7 years 7 months ago

Natures viciousness caught in

Natures viciousness caught in perfect eloquence.
Worm clutched, so Pulitzer.
I love the writing, as if hell goes down like a milkshake

vandiemenspeak

vandiemenspeak

7 years 7 months ago

Thanks Zebra

I love the phrase "hell goes down like a milkshake"! There's a poem in that itself. Oddly, they seem to be quite fussy about the worms, even alighting on the roof with one specimen, then seemingly unsatisfied, flying off to grab a bigger one.

Cheers.

Chris.