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Feb 23, 2011
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Temptation
Temptation
You tempt me to indulge
In the secret vaults of your life,
Like Shakespeare did
And
Was tempted to be tempted
His works included
Temptation
As a thrust
Which in many plays he did do
So do you challenge me?
Alike to go to a bank
And
See how much money can tempt me
Or
Go to a choc-bar
And ask for goodies chocks
And
Hold my breath for want of temptation
Or
You still want me to become a voyeur
viewing men and women
down the stores
And
vie for as many?
Well friend there ain’t any
Limit for temptation
But as many thoughts cross my mind
I feel shy,
Why on earth did you tempt me?
To write poetry
On this tempt for thee.
— loved, Feb 23, 2011
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About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Editing Stage: Rough draft
Critiques
loved
15 years 5 months ago
Thanks
for testing me
to tempt me
i am well under control
no temptation for me
ANY OTHER CHALLENGE WILL BE ACCEPTED BY ME.
Kailashana2
15 years 5 months ago
I challenge you to re-write
I challenge you to re-write this poem. Make it challenging and tempting to the reader.
The beginning and end are good, however, the middle left me quite...ho...hum...
~A
loved
15 years 5 months ago
I SHALL REMOVE THE HO HUM HO
and write another afresh
as soon as i complete my assignment
of wrting five topics for some one
Frederick Kesner
15 years 5 months ago
oooh,
someone is in a very workshop mode!
loved
15 years 5 months ago
yeah
and some one has challenged me to write again afresh and better one
shall................................
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