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Doldrum Gold

Footfalls by drowning doldrums,
the moon hallowed, cruel, pockmarked.

By the bench a dark haired girl
sings this rite's flow, protean,
wearing a wreath of paper hearts.

The hitchciker circles the dead city
square, tying rubber bands
around locks of her hair,
his dreams lucid and fried,
medium, rare.

Staring at the Madonna,
he has a black eclipse,
fashioning old ribbon clips.

The Holy Hour. Drunk with wine
and picture books,
the moon's ambrosia
misses him at high volume.

The dark haired girl sings,
stitching the mane, spinning
the dead eye's holy still,
calm in the moon's pitiless,
hound eyed sainthood.

— fink555, Apr 09, 2018

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: Albany NY

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fink555

fink555

8 years 1 month ago

No, not at all

Poetry doesn't "mean" anything like that-it isn't always a narrative, or a movie meant to play in your mind. That's what Clive Cussler is for

fink555

fink555

8 years 1 month ago

What

was the point of Kubla Khan? Seems pretty dreamy and meaningless from a rationalist viewpoint, doesn't it?