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Feb 10, 2018
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Barrier Warrior:
Walls for protection
Security division
Free in detention
— OriginalRhyku, Feb 10, 2018
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About This Poem
Last Few Words: Walls keep persons out as well as keep persons in. When does a fortress transform into a prison?
Style/Type: Structured: Eastern
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Critiques
weirdelf
8 years 1 month ago
But screws
are always screws.
('screws' Aussie slang for prison guards, same there?)
OriginalRhyku
8 years 1 month ago
Weirdelf
good observation, but unfortunately, those inmates with money will enjoy their stay more than those without courtesy of those guarding the gates- I guess that is the same everywhere also.