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judyanne

May 16, 2016 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

twin

He hears and sees, as I meander through
this world that needs be taken day by day.
For cognisance, he has the perfect view -
my deepest thoughts, to him, are on display.

He shadow escorts me throughout the dreams
where I am Home - it's both surreal and real -
where unconditional love feeds me, it seems.
I wake to find I have a new found zeal.

Conflicting the accepted paradigm
of seperate single conscience, seperate soul,
I know that part of his is part of mine
and, while I am awake, I am not whole.

— judyanne, May 16, 2016

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

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Critiques

10 years ago

A beautiful poem, it lives

A beautiful poem, it lives halfway between this world and the next.Jx

10 years ago

Jane

Thank you for the visit and very kind comment
love judy
xxx

10 years ago

Beautifully written

poem about the shared love of created and creator. One who made us almost like gods with the power to create new life.

10 years ago

hi Keith

Thanks very much for the read and very supportive comment
love judy
xxx

10 years ago

HI Judyanne

So good to read your work - two in one, without which life is not whole. The content of this poem is both powerful and comforting!

Thank you for sharing!

Glad you're back - you are a great teacher - on so many levels.

Love Mand xxx

10 years ago

Mand !!! lovely to see you

Thank you so very much for the lovely and supportive comments
it's nice to be back
love judy
xxx

10 years ago

lovely!

As usual dear Judy.
I liked the "sshadow escorts" expression. (New for me)
And I'd capitalize 'he' and 'his', (just my humble opinion)

Thank you for sharing dear.

10 years ago

thanks Rula

I purposely didn't capitalise 'he / his'....
I didn't want to necessarily tie the subject to a deity, hoping it could be read in other ways as well

Love judy
xxx

10 years ago

I actually took it to mean a

I actually took it to mean a missing sibling. Gone, but for ever with you.
But then, I do take things rather literally at times :-) Jxx

10 years ago

yes Jane

The write has multiple meanings....
thank you
love judy
xxx