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April 2016 - Limerick - Prize -$25 USD Amazon.com Gift Certificate

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Her Majesty's Fall (limerick)

The Queen said "I'm going to the mall"
the King said "darling go have a ball"
when she returned late night
he couldn't watch her plight
she was groggy and about to fall
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Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

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Rula

Rula

10 years ago

a fun write Raj

maybe you need to rework the beginning of the last line.
[she was] groggy and about to fall ..for a better meter unless you feel happy with it. Always good to give a new form a try.
Good shoot with her and his majesties. :)

R

raj

10 years ago

Thanks Rula for your time,

Thanks Rula for your time, comment and suggestion. Your suggestion is spot on, therefore implemented already.

Good to know you found this funny. I was wondering if it would be viewed as "profanity" . Since this one is apparently acceptable, I will have a go with one more :)

Regards,

mand

mand

9 years 11 months ago

Haha

This made me giggle. I have a vision of a very drunk Queen and a very embarrassed King. I reckon there must be a lot of Kings and Queens out there like that! Lol

I love your imagination and the fun loving nature of this poem.

Love to you

Mand xxx

lovedly

lovedly

9 years 11 months ago

All know its only Kings and more QUEENS

Who can go to a mall
and have a fall
as they play with heaven knows whose balls
limericks 'tis after all

king can save his once for all
when a drunken sunken one returns
and asks
where am I
Where are yours!

mand

mand

9 years 11 months ago

Hahahah

Love your comment Loved.

Mand xxx

R

raj

9 years 11 months ago

Hi Lovedly

Thanks for your read and humorous comment...

Regards,

lovedly

lovedly

9 years 11 months ago

as always

i send greetings to those who deserve
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R

raj

9 years 11 months ago

Hi Mand

Good to see you back. Thanks for the time, visit and comment. Good to know you liked it.

Much love..

mand

mand

9 years 11 months ago

Thanks Raj

Looking forward to being more interactive! :)

Loads of love

Mand xxx

mand

mand

9 years 11 months ago

Opps

Sorry - Pressed save twice!

R

raj

8 years 2 months ago

Hahaha...being a limmerick

Hahaha...being a limmerick tried to pack it with fun....wondering if i should mail it to Buckingham Palace...even the Queen deserves a hearty laugh..what do ya think:)

Cheers!

R

raj

8 years 2 months ago

Really? I wish i had her

Really? I wish i had her email ID to send it to her...fun apart...good to know you liked it...may be I will try a few more limericks...

Regards..