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Barbara Writes
Barbara Writes
Apr 04, 2016 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the contest:

April 2016 - Limerick - Prize -$25 USD Amazon.com Gift Certificate

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A Girl Eating Stew (April Contest)

There was a girl eating stew,
she had nothing else to do
standing outside in the cold
all the malls had closed,
so she went instead to the zoo

— Barbara Writes, Apr 04, 2016

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

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Critiques

Keith Logan

Keith Logan

10 years 2 months ago

I like

this logical lass. Indeed, who can blame her?

alidzain

alidzain

10 years 2 months ago

Hi Barbara

I liked this but I find that it doesn't stick to the rules of the contest which are

1. Anapestic
2.5 lines
3. Rhyming pattern AABBA.

Alid

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

10 years 2 months ago

Oh

Thanks don't know much about limericks.

I worked on AABBA and five lines
How is my anaspest

alidzain

alidzain

10 years 2 months ago

Hi Barbara

to be honest, I don't think I'm the right person to ask. All I know about anapest is its pattern
(unstress, unstress, stress)
I've seen the examples from the contest's instructions but I can't see the anapestic rhythm.

Alid

R

raj

10 years 2 months ago

Hi Barbara

i liked this one...i believe it's posted as a limerick and not anapest and it made me smile ...

If I may suggest, you could add a few words to make it flo even more smoothly...just a suggestion..

There was a girl eating stew,
she had nothing [else] to do
standing outside in the cold
all the malls was [had just] closed,
so she went [instead] to the zoo.

Regards,