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Jul 09, 2014
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Sure you do stare
Sure you stare
I gaze at you
as you stare
then watch you take off
with your lovely pair
despite not much hair
in any case I'm bald
I don't care who
at my head does
gaze or stare
as long as they leave my balance hair
I'd love their stare.
take care
yours too!!!
I seem to share...
— lovedly, Jul 09, 2014
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About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Critiques
weirdelf
11 years 11 months ago
I don't get it
Do you really care?
as long as they leave my balance hair? The one you brush across?
Ian.T
11 years 11 months ago
Jess
Maybe there is a faint chance, that our loved is referring to the hair inside the inner ear canal that is excited by a gritty material which gives us a sense of Balance.
No that's going to far outside of our thinking, just have to accept the line is wrong ???
Take care Y'all I still love you no matter what,
Yours Ian.T
There's a little titter running around the room here, I shall capture it with serious thought, and send it on.. La, La.
lovedly
11 years 11 months ago
Ian
thanks for the interlude
lovedly
11 years 11 months ago
hahahaha...at times
I need give reference to Ian's
lovedly
11 years 11 months ago
juss for the moment as time prohibits its promulgation
A TRIBUTE TO AN AUSSIE POET PAR EXCELLENCE JESS
George Bernard Shaw said
"The reasonable man adapts himself to the world;
the unreasonable one persists in trying
to adapt the world to himself.
Therefore, all progress depends on the unreasonable man."
I have also swum against the current
all my life
even though I ain't a swimmer
yes
et all breathless!
Many friends fall by the way side
as I alone stride
the world takes a pride
when one has gone aside
then one is remembered
on an off occasion
at times
some are forgotten
ere!!!
you are young my Jess
a friend indeed
I now guess
But for you I do profess
none would have ever read me
Yes
Oh!
JESS! (((((((.In caps