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Miranda Ortiz
Member since August 19, 2019
Member for 6 years, 9 months
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Forget Me
Why, just why
do you always forget me
You think you're so sly
leaving me feeling like a tiny flea
Supposedly the one you loved
but it's always a fight
How I hate to be shoved
Oh, what a plight
Why can't we just say a final good bye?
You've forgotten me
I gotta learn to just fly
Why can't I simply just be
Always poor you
missing out on what could've been
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Feeling much like a worn shoe
and a thinker among many men
But forget me
let me love, and live
I'm not your she
I have too much to give
Free from the pain
forget me not
I have so much to gain
not destined to stay in this spot
So, forget me
and see who I am
The girl I used to be
no longer gives a damn
You've let me go
and you'll soon see
But now you're putting on a show
and I'll just leave you be
Forgotten by you
now and forever
I will always be true
and you're really not that clever
Forgetting you
forever being missed
It'll be the hardest thing I do
and then, never getting kissed
Goodbye now
my lover and friend!
Pushing forward like a plow
I'll miss you till the very end
© Miranda Ortiz
Miranda Ortiz’s timeline
- August 2024
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19 MonAnniversary
5 years of membership
- August 2020
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19 WedAnniversary
One year of membership
- January 2020
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30 ThuCritiqued
"Paradise is Imagination Ed" by @lovedly
"Lovedly, you're revision has made this even more amazing. Great job! It flows ever so smoothly. For what it's worth, the solde I didn't mention because you'd already explained your motive in using it that way. The E isn…" -
30 ThuCritiqued
"Forever And A Day" by @gregwa8
"I'm so totally a nature lover, and this is beautiful reminder that Earth is ever changing....as are our lives and impacts here!! Your title is what sucked me in and made me read this. It made me wonder what this was goi…" -
27 Mon
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27 MonCritiqued
"Paradise is Imagination Ed" by @lovedly
"I see you're from Romania, so the use of your English threw me off for a few lines. After I overlooked the inaccuracies in the words you used, I must admit this is lovely.... I gotta say, that the world wide web would'v…" -
27 MonFirst critique offered
on "Paradise is Imagination Ed" by @lovedly
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27 MonNew follower
@lovedly
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09 Thu
- August 2019
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26 MonReceived a critique
on Absence, and Longing to Belong from @Pugilist
"Our comments are meant in the spirit of collaboration. We hold ourselves to the standards of honest review and honest effort. If you are not certain where to begin, and that is something we all feel, just ask. I am infa…" -
26 MonReceived a critique
on Absence, and Longing to Belong from @weirdelf
"Very few people are used to the honesty they receive here and it can be a shock to the system. You'll be dishonouring yourself and your work if you quit so easily." -
24 SatReceived a critique
on Absence, and Longing to Belong from @Geezer
"is not much like punctuation of a letter or a story. Myself, I would not use commas and periods at the end of the sentences, and unless I wanted to make a really powerful statement or ask a question; I don't use exclama…" -
24 SatReceived a critique
on Absence, and Longing to Belong from @Pugilist
"Thank you for your openness to critique. Please share your exploration of this piece. As to where to begin when editing, that is the crux. For me, I compare my intent with my efforts. What did I what to communicate with…" -
23 FriReceived a critique
on Absence, and Longing to Belong from @Sparrow 42
"Pugilist is able to comment on the structure of your poem, I am not versed in correct punctuation, so I just go on what I read. The ups and downs of your write are scattered in what I think is your thoughts. As Jonathan…" -
23 FriReceived a critique
on Absence, and Longing to Belong from @Pugilist
"Miranda, I am left with a dilemma. You have asked for the raw truth and have indicated you are not actively editing. This appears to be a contradiction to me, but, I am going to take your request for raw feedback at fac…" -
23 FriFirst publication
Absence, and Longing to Belong
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23 Fri
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19 MonJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 4 days later.
About Me
About me
I'm a stay at home, homeschooling mom who also happens to be a writer!
Location: Tennessee, United States
Favorite Poets
Walt Whitman
Edgar Allen Poe
E. E. Cummings
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Workshops
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| Critique For New And Old | (syllabus) | Plunge Pool | Started 2020-01-16 | Concluded |