MichelleK

Member since February 25, 2011

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I am not who I am

Posted Jan 6, 2013 · 31 lines · 12 critiques

Hubris…
how abhorred am I
that bulls
surround me
all my bones
lay scattered—
a chaotic abacus

What is it
I hold?
— hubris?
this stunted form
my crippled spirit

forest creatures
stray

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far from me
wolves
bark
at my shadow

What is it I own?
—hubris ?
alone
By whose
name do I go?

Richard
Spindle-shanks
David
Hobble-foot?
Which of these am I
how are monsters named?

—hubris?
‘Rumpelstiltskin is my name…’

MichelleK’s timeline

February 2026
25 Wed

Anniversary
15 years of membership
February 2021
25 Thu

Anniversary
10 years of membership
September 2016
17 Sat

Received a critique
on XVIII: The Moon from @Esker
"hounds mourn anemic moons flows better.. I re read this long long after but Uve always been on my mind and I never even noted that U desired to write with no emotional musing...Under...shifts the scene the natural defau…"
February 2016
25 Thu

Anniversary
5 years of membership
October 2013
23 Wed

Received a critique
on I am not who I am from @Dalton
"Maybe try and build on the piece a little. I like what you have here but feel the thirst for more. Maybe other characters, As Jess seems to suggest. John"
March 2013
26 Tue

Received a critique
on I am not who I am from @Ian.T
"This piece reflects what I would assume the feelings of someone that hates their physical form and thinks only that others see the same image.. It happens many times in this world that people prejudge others by their ap…"
26 Tue

Received a critique
on I am not who I am from @Esker
"crumple life vortex crush brash innocence burned off in shockwave awe Re reading this beautiful poem twice over from the once over once upon a time there delved ..."
22 Fri

New follower
@Esker
22 Fri

Received a critique
on I am not who I am from @loved
"your poem is just monstrously beautiful. i loved it"
22 Fri

New follower
@loved
22 Fri

Critiqued
"Plastic operation" by @Frenchf
"The rhyme is understated and subtle; in my books, this is a great thing. Rhyme (in my opinion) should never bog down or inhibit the aural reading of a poem. The symmetry to the stanzas is really pleasing visually and gi…"
21 Thu

Critiqued
"(tickle-tickle)" by @godshouldnthave
"but something is seriously going wrong here. I'm keeping my sentences simple here so they are easy read and communicate my point clearly. Concise critique is important. In my experience, long (especially verbose) critiq…"
February 2013
12 Tue

Critiqued
"The Wanted" by @Desell
"There is a definite confusion of voice. As I was reading I kept getting the old west wanted poster feel and then in other lines like a cult leader feel. I think this needs to have an external narrator, there you can dev…"
January 2013
15 Tue

Received a critique
on I am not who I am from @weirdelf
"Rumplestiltskin has no more hubris than the pitiful thing of an unguessable name. Remember he has a lot more. He knows how to spin straw to gold, for example."
14 Mon

Received a critique
on I am not who I am from @weirdelf
"all resort to hubris in their deformity and rejection. Frankenstein's Monster, (Beauty and) The Beast and others either nurture their gentleness or it is finally destroyed by the fear and hatred of others. Broad general…"
07 Mon

Received a critique
on I am not who I am from @Geezer
"do not love ourselves, we will not be loved. It is not hubris, to want to be accepted for who and what we are. Do not mistake tolerated with acceptance. You make a good case for the monsters of the world. Listen! I hear…"
06 Sun

Critiqued
"reincarnated" by @Seren
"This is an amazing poem, however there are a few tiny things that may need revising: - the second stanza seems a little image heavy compared to your others; I think you may have to strip back some imagery or add in some…"
06 Sun

Critiqued
"A Nameless Existence" by @The Rain Sprite
"This poem really reminded me of the gothic tradition. You have all the elements of a gothic here: romantic (in the literary sense of the term) atmosphere, soliloquy, death, mirrors breaking, castle references etc. You h…"
06 Sun

Posted a poem
I am not who I am
"Hubris…"
Open thread 31 lines
04 Fri

Critiqued
"O P A L " by @Esker
"I didn't realise it was in a form. Just ignore me:p!"
04 Fri

Critiqued
"pigs" by @kittymchale
"However ( and this is probably just me) I think this would flow and read better without any punctuation. Again just my opinion:). Excellent work! You have some really unique and strong images here."
04 Fri

Critiqued
"Life in a Cuppa" by @crypticbard
"Your images are so clear. Amazing. I'd get rid of the first two "the"s in the first stanza, as I don't think they're needed and distract from the image. However this is just my personal opinion:). Beautiful work!"
04 Fri

New follower
@weirdelf
February 2012
25 Sat

Anniversary
One year of membership
05 Sun

Posted a poem
Trade (Story-Telling In Verse)
"The old ones were good at makin’ lives for themselves,"
Open thread 46 lines
January 2012
29 Sun

Posted a poem
Hope Does Not BelongREVISED - More Meter - Iambic Pentameter - Exercise 2
"Today the daises rot. Her hair, so fine"
Open thread 14 lines
23 Mon

Posted a poem
More Meter Ex. 1 Trochaic Pentameter
"x = stressed o= unstressed"
Open thread 17 lines
09 Mon

Posted a poem
One Art
"She lay beneath a barren tree"
Open thread 22 lines
December 2011
12 Mon

Posted a poem
Narrative Poem: As He Sat Sadly By Her Side
"I"
Open thread 207 lines
August 2011
09 Tue

Posted a poem
Hobart, 19th of July, 1824: Alexander Pierce muses while awaiting the gallows
"We returned to alien children"
Open thread 14 lines
June 2011
26 Sun

Posted a poem
XVIII: The Moon
"overwhelmed"
Open thread 8 lines
April 2011
30 Sat

Most-discussed work
Bats Say It Better

14 critiques to date.
30 Sat

Posted a poem
Bats Say It Better
"Bats sing better harmonies, outside my window"
Open thread 10 lines
March 2011
21 Mon

First critique offered
on "Chinese" by @weirdelf
04 Fri

First publication
A Sapphic of Death Row
04 Fri

Posted a poem
A Sapphic of Death Row
"His hair singes, blazing, warm: smoulders musk tongued—"
Open thread 4 lines
February 2011
25 Fri

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 7 days later.

About Me

About me

I'm a honours student at University of Wollongong in Creative Writing. My core creative writing subject is poetry.

I'm always happy for work-shopping and receiving feedback and criticism, you can't improve until you know what's wrong or not working.

Because of uni I will usually be less active on this site, so if you would like some additional critique or opinion on a piece you can email it to me directly and I'll get back to you a.s.a.p!

Regards,
Michelle
[email protected]

Location: New South Wales, AUS

Favorite Poets

Charles Baudelaire

Gottried Benn

William Cowper

Michael Dransfield

Benjamen Frater

Allen Ginsberg

Gwen Harwood

Lautréamont

Edvard Munch

Ezra Pound

Arthur Rimbaud

Alan Wearne

Francis Webb

John Wilmot II Earl of Rochester

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Workshops

		Skill level:
Storytelling in Verse	(syllabus)	Olympic Pool, Plunge Pool	Started 2012-02-04	Concluded
More Meter	(syllabus)	Shark Pool, Plunge Pool	Started 2012-01-11	Concluded
Deep analysis of poetry	(syllabus)	Shark Pool	Started 2011-08-01	Concluded

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on XVIII: The Moon from @Esker

5 years of membership

on I am not who I am from @Dalton

on I am not who I am from @Ian.T

on I am not who I am from @Esker

on I am not who I am from @loved

"Plastic operation" by @Frenchf

"(tickle-tickle)" by @godshouldnthave

"The Wanted" by @Desell

on I am not who I am from @weirdelf

on I am not who I am from @weirdelf

on I am not who I am from @Geezer

"reincarnated" by @Seren

"A Nameless Existence" by @The Rain Sprite

"O P A L " by @Esker

"pigs" by @kittymchale

"Life in a Cuppa" by @crypticbard

One year of membership

on "Chinese" by @weirdelf

Membership begins

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