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Marlies Vonn
Member since March 8, 2018
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Our Cells of Blue - March April Contest 2018
I press a finger against my glass
and you press one up against yours
My cell won't let me out of class
to greet you at my one front door.
Binary and bots, you see,
tend us both so carefully.
Confined under the same wide sky,
never seeing with our eyes.
I dream of fires beside the beach
your eyes, your soul, your gilded speech
But glass and prints of hand remain
All my dreams are in a frame.
We're both electric – flat screens of blue
If the charge is gone then so are you
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Dare we throw our cords away
connecting hands in light of day?
Then out of framed screen I grew
no binary, no bots of blue
I walked barefoot along your path
My breath upon your window glass.
You saw my face beyond the frame
and balked as I was not the same.
Both we ran back to cells of blue
our cords connected to our true.
Now, I am me and you are you.
We're safe and sane in cells of blue.
Marlies Vonn’s timeline
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09 FriReceived a critique
on Our Cells of Blue - March April Contest 2018 from @weirdelf
"I think you achieve the goal with remarkable subtlety and use of subtext. All that needs to be said about the hardware is in the fourth stanza guys! And it is in the title. Speaks well to the alienation that universal c…" -
09 FriCritiqued
"Ode to the Cell Phone March Contest" by @lonlyhrtsclub13
"I'd love to set this to music. I read it and I hear the tune already..." -
09 FriCritiqued
"Serving Lifetime in a Cell [Sunku for March Contest]" by @raj
"This was very relatable - especially with the knocking on the door. For me, if someone does knock, you would figure I'm wanted by police guaging by the way I jump. Almost scared of the outside sometimes. I enjoyed the p…" -
09 FriFirst critique offered
on "Serving Lifetime in a Cell [Sunku for March Contest]" by @raj
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09 FriReceived a critique
on Our Cells of Blue - March April Contest 2018 from @weirdelf
"Gary bloody Numan, eh. A bit of a tosser but good music and lyrics. I saw him live in Aussie in 1980, good show. Here's a rarity, terrible noisy sound though- https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZF4Z6smOrZw" -
09 FriReceived a critique
on Our Cells of Blue - March April Contest 2018 from @raj
"I concur with the comment of Jess. This is out of box stuff. I liked thoughts given voice. ......................................" -
09 FriReceived a critique
on Our Cells of Blue - March April Contest 2018 from @weirdelf
"Can a poem submitted for a contest be revised or edited before the judging?" -
09 FriReceived a critique
on Our Cells of Blue - March April Contest 2018 from @Sparrow
"I agree with Jess, that here we have a close encounter with a cell phone, and its attributes, the communication is subtle and meaningful. If there is a need to enlighten or be more exact as to the main object somewhere…" -
08 ThuReceived a critique
on Our Cells of Blue - March April Contest 2018 from @weirdelf
"Welcome to Neopoet! I look forward to much more of your work, and your critique." -
08 ThuReceived a critique
on Our Cells of Blue - March April Contest 2018 from @Eumolpus
"I am confused of the characters, the I, he and she, and the internal logic of what's going on. Yesterday in my local poetry workshop the same thing happened to me, I presented a poem which was clear to me but nobody in…" -
08 ThuReceived a critique
on Our Cells of Blue - March April Contest 2018 from @Geezer
"seeing the reference to the phone in this one. Can you be a little more explicit? The rhythm was good and the pattern/pacing too. ~ Geezer. ." -
08 ThuFirst publication
Our Cells of Blue - March April Contest 2018
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