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The Lord's Words
Member since November 1, 2017
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After departure.
You were once my all,
My happiness, my love, my heart,
I knew this during our fall,
In the last tender moments of our depart
What I would give to hold you again,
To have another feel of those sweet gentle lips,
Your warmth that transcended through rain,
To touch your silky curly locks at their tips.
In your absence, the world has lost its shine,
The future holds no other description but bleak,
Now that I've lost all in the world that was mine
Cheerful songs fail to escape a bird's beak.
Cursed to never love, to see happiness in the world,
When you were taken away from me, I lost my world.
The Lord's Words’s timeline
- November 2022
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01 TueAnniversary
5 years of membership
- November 2018
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01 ThuAnniversary
One year of membership
- November 2017
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23 ThuReceived a critique
on After departure. from @Keith Logan
"First, my appologies for not bidding you welcome. New faces are always a positive by keeping the site fresh and the old hands on their toes (how's that for a mixed metaphor?) In a sonnet you are aiming for ten syllables…" -
23 ThuReceived a critique
on After departure. from @Keith Logan
"overall but the last two lines end on the same rhyme. How about something like this? Cursed to never love, to see happiness unfurled, When you were taken away from me, I lost my world." -
22 WedCritiqued
"First Love True " by @Blue-eyed Bolla
"Great poem, I really could feel a consistent rhythm as I read through. At first glance, it seemed sort of long, but your use of repetition made it worth the read. However, the jump from being in squalor and pain at fort…" -
22 WedFirst critique offered
on "First Love True " (since unpublished) by @Blue-eyed Bolla
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22 WedReceived a critique
on After departure. from @Marvel Godwyn
"A nicely crafted poem depicting departure of a loved one and yearnings for the return.Thanks for sharing, The Lord's Words." -
22 WedReceived a critique
on Never to know... from @themoonman
"I see your first submission was never commented on, you will need to jump in, comment on other poets works, let them know you are here and have something to say. This poem, the title sounds good but it makes little sens…" -
22 WedReceived a critique
on After departure. from @themoonman
"I'm wondering why you would use that as your username, seems an almost impossible feat to aspire to and it's a bit daunting which may keep some poets at bay. Anyway, your poem has the rhythm although some feels forced t…" -
22 Wed
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02 ThuReceived a critique
on A nation yet to be broken…yet to be fixed from @Eumolpus
"Your poem is more a political speech in the form of a poem. I agree by in large with the politics, other than "What could possibly explain our continued existence/if not for the presence of a higher Existence." (needs a…" -
01 WedReceived a critique
on A nation yet to be broken…yet to be fixed from @weirdelf
"I hear your love for your country. You state it eloquently and strongly. But not poetically. A few haphazard rhymes do not turn prose into a poem. I bet you do not read much poetry, do you? There are many more aspects t…" -
01 WedFirst publication
A nation yet to be broken…yet to be fixed (since unpublished)
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01 WedJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
About Me
About me
Trying to make a difference, one letter at a time.
Location: Nigeria, Ibadan
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Betrand Ndomenang
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