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LB
Lonely Baku
Member since January 16, 2020
Member for 6 years, 4 months
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One Bullet
The pain, it shoots me like a bullet,
Takes me to the ground
Makes me cry in oblivious shame,
But still it makes no sound
I know through all the loudest screams
Bravery is the thing I need
Shot's been fired, a downward spiral
And the fallen body's no good deed.
I drop to my knees in a silent cry
Try as I might, I cannot see
Nobody deserves to die,
But there they are in front of me
Hopelessly, they lie on the ground I sit, but do not shiver
Burning flames engulf the area And all the corpse's wither.
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All it takes is the shot from one bullet
To end what one holds dear,
And the echoing sound, which throws one to the ground
Makes the end of life so clear,
There is no joy, no happiness
Only the unending grief
In which the kin cry, unaware
And the one who passed will weep.
Lonely Baku’s timeline
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- January 2020
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18 SatReceived a critique
on One Bullet from @weirdelf
"from experienced and caring poets Here is my reading, Where I stumble and get it wrong look at your own prosody, cadence, meter. I'm a very experienced reader. https://soundcloud.com/neopoet/one-bullet-by-lonely-haku" -
17 FriReceived a critique
on One Bullet from @etienne
"i really enjoyed reading this, the message is very clear. if you wanted to have your readers feel your pain id suggest taking the time to know how you really feel and express it in the most vulnerable way possible. grea…" -
16 ThuReceived a critique
on One Bullet from @Geezer
"that you have been welcomed in a proper fashion! I think your title is good and it brought me in, which what a title is supposed to do. your language is good. It could use a little smoothing out, but I think if you read…" -
16 ThuReceived a critique
on One Bullet from @Sparrow 42
"Firstly welcome to Neopoet. A good write and quite vivid. They say that most times you are unaware of being shot. If it is fatal then the transition is fast, Only those that linger for a while feel the pain, and you hav…" -
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