Lee

Member since August 15, 2020

Member for 5 years, 9 months

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11 Poems

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Fly Away With Me

Posted May 18, 2021 · 27 lines · 2 critiques

Come and fly away with me, take a journey
lets see the stars, and touch the sky
lets just fly away
and never look back

come and fly away with me, don't you trust me?
just reach into my capsule
lets wonder the cosmos in my yellow rocket ship
have you ever been to mars?
its better than here
with him

come fly away with me mommy
Won't you come and blast through galaxies
travel lightyears
don't you love me?

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just trust me mommy
he cant hurt us
not in my yellow rocket ship

so come and fly away with me mommy
we'll be safe
in outer space
with my little yellow rocket ship
and you to keep me safe

fly away
and be happy
i love you mommy
won't you come
and fly away with me?

Lee’s timeline

August 2025
15 Fri

Anniversary
5 years of membership
August 2021
15 Sun

Anniversary
One year of membership
May 2021
18 Tue

Received a critique
on A Day In The Life from @lovedly
"just like everyone else just like everyone else shows paucity of words use metaphors similis likes etc AND HITLER should be a caps H etc and this is your 7th poem today not one have u critiqued do so please and may be c…"
18 Tue

Received a critique
on Fly Away With Me from @lovedly
"when I was 17 now at 82 i offer what I may know listen to Gee now read bitterly any of my poems thrash me then see how many I shall critique to help you just a kid"
18 Tue

Received a critique
on A Day In The Life from @Geezer
"really likes this one! You know the rest; C&P! ~ Geezer. ."
18 Tue

Received a critique
on Shotgun from @Geezer
"favorite songs! I have a video of it, made up in my mind and whenever I hear it, I play the video! LoL Nothing to crit here, except the usual! PUNCTUATION! ~ Geezer. ."
18 Tue

Received a critique
on Crimson from @Geezer
"making sense when he says this is too long. I have written much longer stories and no one complains! Especially, when they are about 'Killer'. You do seem to have a propensity for leaving out the apostrophes and punctua…"
18 Tue

Received a critique
on Heroine from @Geezer
"and punctuation! I think the one-word title is great, but... the word you are looking for is Heroin, without the [E] which makes it a female hero! ~ Geezer. ."
18 Tue

Received a critique
on Low_Battery% from @Geezer
"I am not a big fan of run-on lines, but they seem to work here. I get the feeling that the low-battery may be the problem. Use capitals and good punctuation; like Adrien, I am old-school, I think that it makes for bette…"
18 Tue

Received a critique
on Fly Away With Me from @Geezer
"that you have not gained much in the way of critique here on this site. I think that is what you mean by Neopoet has not done you any favors. I am glad that you feel like that. There is a price to pay for getting critiq…"
18 Tue

Posted a poem
Fly Away With Me
"Come and fly away with me, take a journey"
Open thread 27 lines
October 2020
14 Wed

Posted a poem
The Dark side of the Moon
"Her precious lips fade to black"
Open thread 16 lines
August 2020
23 Sun

Posted a poem
Low_Battery%
"Thank you"
Open thread 49 lines
22 Sat

Posted a poem
Heroine
"nothing is clear"
Open thread 20 lines
21 Fri

Posted a poem
Crimson
"Dead, is the poets deepest flaw"
Open thread 24 lines
20 Thu

Posted a poem
Can't
"Can't stand it"
Open thread 22 lines
19 Wed

Posted a poem
Shotgun
"its ok little sister"
Open thread 32 lines
18 Tue

Critiqued
"Night Walk" by @Adrien Brook
"the flow is great, it can be a bit rough around the edges near the middle but this one of your best and i think your style is starting to shine, i hope we could collaborate some time :))"
18 Tue

Critiqued
"September" by @pleiades
"if you're a human then technically you're a human - weird right?"
18 Tue

Critiqued
"Low Setting Sun" by @Lavender
"that if you eat paint and taste colors i can weigh -15 pounds?"
18 Tue

Posted a poem
A Day In The Life
"I wake up"
Open thread 97 lines
17 Mon

Critiqued
"3am mania" by @Adrien Brook
"i cant add anymore than what others have said, its lovely, just lovely"
17 Mon

Critiqued
"Eternal Morning" by @Adrien Brook
"im in love with you style, this is my favorite of yours, the message is a bit hard to get but i gotta say i envy your work"
17 Mon

Posted a poem
The Snow Owl
"The frozen trees sway in the wind"
Open thread 24 lines
16 Sun

Posted a poem
Goddess of the sea
"way down"
Open thread 52 lines
15 Sat

Critiqued
"Lambs in Winter " by @Gracy
"I'm not much of a critic and i wouldn't even know where to begin, but i just wanted to say you made a very beautiful poem i look forward to more from you. :)"
15 Sat

New follower
@Adrien Brook
15 Sat

Critiqued
"Breaking Wave" by @Adrien Brook
"i quite liked this, the title was a good hook and i have to say your vocabulary is well crafted in this. i hope you make more like this. :)"
15 Sat

First critique offered
on "Breaking Wave" (since unpublished) by @Adrien Brook
15 Sat

First publication
Coffee
15 Sat

Posted a poem
Coffee
"As i sit here"
Open thread 65 lines
15 Sat

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.
15 Sat

Highest posting month
August 2020 — 9 poems

About Me

About me

I'm a 17 yr old writer from Florida, i like writing and creating stories so this seems like a nice fit for me.

Location: Polk, USA

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Coffee

Posted: 15 August, 2020

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5 years of membership

One year of membership

on A Day In The Life from @lovedly

on Fly Away With Me from @lovedly

on A Day In The Life from @Geezer

on Shotgun from @Geezer

on Crimson from @Geezer

on Heroine from @Geezer

on Low_Battery% from @Geezer

on Fly Away With Me from @Geezer

"Night Walk" by @Adrien Brook

"September" by @pleiades

"Low Setting Sun" by @Lavender

"3am mania" by @Adrien Brook

"Eternal Morning" by @Adrien Brook

"Lambs in Winter " by @Gracy

"Breaking Wave" by @Adrien Brook

on "Breaking Wave" (since unpublished) by @Adrien Brook

Membership begins

August 2020 — 9 poems

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