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Lavaheart
Member since October 21, 2018
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aurora glide
Gently, she goes
as soft as a fawn
opens the window
and waits for the dawn
fireflies glow
wind caresses her face
as she sheds all the shadows
not leaving a trace
She dons velvet darkness
wrapped in its cloak
releases all poisons,
sylphlike,
in smoke
She is preparing for battle
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in her own, quiet way
She only wants wholeness
as she breaks through the gray
For soon she will weave
prismatic wonders of spells
her own inner aurora
lighting heaven from hell
For suffered she has
and it's time to forgive
unlock self-made prisons
and let herself live
and now as sunrise approaches
stars still in sight
she turns the skeleton key
and glides
into
flight
Lavaheart’s timeline
- October 2023
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21 SatAnniversary
5 years of membership
- October 2019
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21 MonAnniversary
One year of membership
- October 2018
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30 TueReceived a critique
on aurora glide from @raj
"I liked the lines "her own inner aurora lighting heaven from hell" which i believe is the foundation of your theme....nice.. ..................................................................................." -
29 MonCritiqued
"Sunlight and Shadow " by @Jasmine.
"Hello, Jasmine. I actually found this to be achingly beautiful, for its honesty. It is delicate in language yet full of raw emotion, and the last lines hit it home. It truly moved me. Thank you." -
29 MonReceived a critique
on aurora glide from @brittle light
"quite charming...but the meter seems a little too "cute" for the subject, even though it reads smooth as silk (which is no mean feat in itself) It has a jaunty bounce, imbuing the optimism of the piece, yet belies the s…" -
29 MonReceived a critique
on aurora glide from @gregwa8
"nice rhymes and rhythm to this poem. the nature imagery goes well with the magical imagery (especially the likening spells to the aurora) and I'm drawn into the emotional life of the protagonist. is this about someone w…" -
28 SunReceived a critique
on aurora glide from @themoonman
"I like it, sparkling with imagery and presented with leading punctuation indicating just how you want it read, very refreshing to see. This should have artwork to accompany, just a thought I had while warming to the end…" -
28 Sun
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25 ThuCritiqued
" And You Touch Back " by @Eumolpus
"I saw this as describing the way poets touch one another, from all different places, without ever having met. I felt it was saying that we are reflections of connection: our words echoing each other's feelings, reverber…" -
25 ThuCritiqued
"Forbidden Love " by @Eumolpus
"I very much like how you captured the erotic spirit, here. The lines "Whose daughters drone like whales," and "Love will show the spot Where stray men spray their liquid" particularly stand out for me as striking imager…" -
25 ThuCritiqued
"DONATE YOUR EYES (ADDRESSED TO MULTIPLE PEOPLE) in verses" by @lovedly
"I really enjoyed this, lovedly. Even though I do not know you, felt your heart through this tender and sensitive piece. I also loved the clean way your rhymes flowed. The eyes are defintiely windows to our souls... Peac…" -
25 ThuFirst critique offered
on "DONATE YOUR EYES (ADDRESSED TO MULTIPLE PEOPLE) in verses" by @lovedly
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23 TueReceived a critique
on raw cherry monsoon from @Eumolpus
"Very physical and emotional at the same time. Not sure we need the last 3 lines. A person's forever is a bit abstract for me in such a physical poem. would end it: Wash over me Hold me in cupped hands, gently Take me by…" -
23 TueReceived a critique
on Recipe for Escape from @Eumolpus
"and the time it took to put them together. Thank you for taking my comment as I meant it, it was of course never meant to be insulting in any way, as some writers would take offense. Like who am I to tell anyone else wh…" -
23 Tue
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21 SunReceived a critique
on Recipe for Escape from @Eumolpus
"using a few different literary devises with a cooking recipe and metaphysics. Fun read. I can't really make any comments. The work is well self-contained. It could work just as well on the clever satire page in the New…" -
21 SunReceived a critique
on Recipe for Escape from @chevyvent
"Today we either suffer inside or draw back from the river Nile it hits inside there's a vault that protects each member with cool written waters on a slate of stone we remove the pillars of last bent toward establishmen…" -
21 SunFirst publication
Recipe for Escape
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