large marge

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Touch

Posted May 31, 2024 · 18 lines · 2 critiques

""but oh lord, when he died I thought that maybe I could have saved him if I just reached out that quarter of an inch between us on that bed and held him." that quarter of an inch in this vision is the great expanse of fear and ignorance that must be crossed bravely and with integrity, to human hope"
-Andrea Dworkin on Baldwin

whats to be said about love that I haven't already said before
it hurts, its thirst, its curse
somehow its easy to write about the complexities of sorrow,
and sorrow is the fruit of love when watered with the ephemeral nature of existence
turning ones head away from endings what remains is simple
a hand wrapped around a soft waist
belly full of red bitter alcohol and feeling full of the sun
like when van gogh would eat his yellow paint
hungry skin against hungry skin
we feast together in moonlight
arms carry legs and back and it all spins
hair brushing past cheek
we settle and we smell each other
and we know each other wordlessly
and in that moment everything is perfect.
I'm a big fan of drawing together. its the pulling apart that gives me pause

large marge’s timeline

June 2024
01 Sat

Received a critique
on Touch from @Geezer
"I was right! You have a great many thoughts of love to expound upon. I hope that you will continue to let us read your work. No matter the sex or perception of a lover, when you feel these deep connections, it is a plea…"
May 2024
31 Fri

Critiqued
"somehow" by @zach
"there's nothing better than that feeling and there's nothing else like reading about it."
31 Fri

Critiqued
"The Cup of Hermes " by @Amo
"haven't heard about the cup of Hermes before, so I liked that reference. maybe the narrative is lost on me. is crawled like an infant a reference to 1 cor 13? maybe im grasping at straws here. also I like your rhyme sch…"
31 Fri

Posted a poem
Touch
"""but oh lord, when he died I thought that maybe I could have saved him if I just reached out that quarter of an inch between us on that bed and held him." that quarter of an inch in this vision is the great expanse of fear and ignorance that must be crossed bravely and with integrity, to human hope""
Open thread 18 lines
31 Fri

Received a critique
on have you ever felt like a boquet of flowers? from @Geezer
"not at all. I just think that you can condense and trim lines, so that you do not stumble when connecting them. You kept them after she gave them to you, slowly they dried out in the stale air of your room, in a trailer…"
29 Wed

Received a critique
on have you ever felt like a boquet of flowers? from @Geezer
"I wondered when you would show up again. Sorry that it's a lonely, miserable post, that brings you back. You have plenty of good lines here. I think that you stumble a little bit when you try to fit too many ideas in on…"
28 Tue

Posted a poem
have you ever felt like a boquet of flowers?
"You kept them after she gave them to you, and"
Open thread 26 lines
June 2023
08 Thu

Received a critique
on Look up from @Obadiah Grey
"Well, I'm thankful that the "internal logic" is not consistent! The piece grants me my own conclusion. Initial thoughts is "Look up" hints at religion or God. Or, perhaps sexual preference. (I don't mind being way off m…"
07 Wed

Posted a poem
Look up
"A fruit lies on the ground,"
Open thread 8 lines
April 2023
04 Tue

Received a critique
on Crooked from @Geezer
"I have a similar problem, with my younger self. I could have, should have and would have, taken better care of my health. Unlike you, I have waited too long. Your poem has a lot of good advice in it and I wish you the b…"
04 Tue

Critiqued
"Could Have, Would Have, Should Have" by @Clentin
"I like the message of this. I relate to it a lot. We do our best with what we know and the cards were dealt from support systems that arent always suportive enough. What a trial learning youve done your best, AND you ne…"
04 Tue

Posted a poem
Crooked
"My Great Grandmother used to say"
Open thread 51 lines
March 2023
21 Tue

Critiqued
"A New Hole (by Steven, Cats Husband)" by @Candlewitch
""the edges will slowly toward rhe center as the rest of my life oozes in" God thats good"
21 Tue

Critiqued
"Menagerie" by @Leslie
"I like the message here a lot. I think its easy to put the fault on yourself or others, to sit in either shame or blame, especialy in those dark nighttime moments. I like how this captures that"
November 2022
25 Fri

Anniversary
One year of membership
October 2022
14 Fri

Received a critique
on I Love Her from @Geezer
"I was inspired to write this little thing for you, describing a scenario that appeared in my head. I'm not sure of why, just that I was intrigued by the idea of how your love came to be? The letter said "I love you" She…"
September 2022
27 Tue

Received a critique
on I Love Her from @lovedly
"so most pretend you know it have experience read Gee he has the thesaurus of love seeds"
26 Mon

Received a critique
on Aching from @Geezer
"I've missed you. I was a little worried that the "bug" may have gotten you. You have written a bittersweet poem and I imagine that this has what kept you away, not a physical sickness, but a sickness of loss, a piece of…"
25 Sun

Critiqued
"A silent seed" by @Edward nigma
"I really like the rhythm of this. I imagine myself as the seed and that the preassures are lessons."
25 Sun

Posted a poem
Aching
"I miss her in the way that sometimes people say"
Open thread 31 lines
May 2022
16 Mon

Critiqued
"Cat & eddy styx" by @Candlewitch
"This is really good, I think the ending does a good job of taking it full circle about being the "monster and victim". I woudnt mind reading more material on asking for gods help, or the speakers relationship w church/g…"
11 Wed

Critiqued
"When Lights go out Come Again" by @lovedly
"I feel speechless. Comfort me more than yourself... My grandfather used to take me to a wendys along the susquehanna to look with binoculars at the island where hundreds of snowy egrets would roost. I like to think of h…"
07 Sat

Posted a poem
Haunted memories
"There was something about that baloon that was haunted"
Open thread 48 lines
April 2022
28 Thu

Most-discussed work
I Love Her

11 critiques to date.
28 Thu

Posted a poem
I Love Her
"I love her like a summers day loves a peach,"
Open thread 33 lines
22 Fri

Posted a poem
Fire poem (in the style of emily dickinson)
"Im worried for a fire waiting, solemn"
Open thread 16 lines
04 Mon

Posted a poem
Morning Aroma
"I wake up hungover"
Open thread 19 lines
March 2022
28 Mon

Posted a poem
flowers alight on birds wings
"the lake is made of dino piss,"
Open thread 18 lines
10 Thu

Posted a poem
Arborism and Therapy Arent That Different
"branches on trees grow as independent systems."
Open thread 17 lines
07 Mon

Posted a poem
rock middle
"i have had many scrapes with stone"
Open thread 5 lines
November 2021
29 Mon

First critique offered
on "Into the Bird-World" by @Anh Ha Long Tac bui
25 Thu

First publication
I Quit Smoking Last Week...Again
25 Thu

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.

About Me

About me

I am a poet musician and student residing in New Mexico. Things I like to write about are plants, depression, memories of passion, and my complicated relationship with religion and fate. I mostly just want to receive feedback to improove my writing

Location: USA - NM

Favorite Poets

Emily Dickinson

Frank O'Hara

Contest Wins

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on Touch from @Geezer

"somehow" by @zach

"The Cup of Hermes " by @Amo

on have you ever felt like a boquet of flowers? from @Geezer

on have you ever felt like a boquet of flowers? from @Geezer

on Look up from @Obadiah Grey

on Crooked from @Geezer

"Could Have, Would Have, Should Have" by @Clentin

"A New Hole (by Steven, Cats Husband)" by @Candlewitch

"Menagerie" by @Leslie

One year of membership

on I Love Her from @Geezer

on I Love Her from @lovedly

on Aching from @Geezer

"A silent seed" by @Edward nigma

"Cat & eddy styx" by @Candlewitch

"When Lights go out Come Again" by @lovedly

on "Into the Bird-World" by @Anh Ha Long Tac bui

Membership begins

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