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elefentee
Member since June 2, 2014
Member for 12 years
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cloud break
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Mrs Duncan sits in her wheelchair
letting family and friends
press food into her hands,
and tissues to her dry eyes
a single framed photo
graces the polished sideboard.
his long, gentle face, surrounded
by cards and flowers,
smiles out at those gathered there
Mrs Duncan seems indifferent
their youngest daughter, a black beetle,
scurries between kitchen and lounge room
with plate after plate after plate
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of food
activity keeps her from screaming
muffled conversations
sound around the room
in a corner, the cat on his chair
eyes the scene with lazy curiosity
and an almost desire to swipe a paw
at the next person who tries to pat him
teaspoons tinkle against china like fairy bells
the clock on the wall tick tocks away
outside, in the garden,
eight year old Pannee is twirling
catching raindrops on her tongue
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elefentee’s timeline
- June 2024
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02 SunAnniversary
10 years of membership
- June 2019
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02 SunAnniversary
5 years of membership
- June 2015
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02 TueAnniversary
One year of membership
- August 2014
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17 SunReceived a critique
on cloud break from @weirdelf
"They empower through succinctity and improved word choice. As young surfers, seeing a perfect wave, we would say "not a drop of water out of place". Not a word out of place here." - June 2014
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28 SatReceived a critique
on cloud break from @themoonman
"A quiet mouse heard (strength is indeed a virtue) ... thanks for posting this eloquent piece. Welcome to Neopoet. Richard" -
26 ThuReceived a critique
on cloud break from @Ian.T
"Your first work has been well accepted here and was very good have you more for us to read. Your Profile seems vague or are you waiting to see if we are a good bunch ??. You take care out there and once again come talk…" -
11 WedFirst critique offered
on "At Last With Fall" (since unpublished) by @paleoray
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03 TueFirst publication
cloud break
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03 Tue
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03 Tue
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02 MonJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
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