doomhead

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Apocalypse

Posted May 7, 2014 · 24 lines · 5 critiques

The apocalypse is tomorrow
so batton down your lungs with the red earth
wet the dust to make clay
cover yourself in what you think is your worth,
The apocalypse is tomorrow
but throw your sorrows away.
We don't need them in this deathland
we care no more about what you say.

The apocalypse is today.
An unfamiliar came down to say, "I love you.
All things must pass - even the rains."
and "Whatever happens, I am above you."
The apocalypse is today,
I watched the crowds congregate beneath the final cloud

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ballasted in temperamental shadow, painted
in the sticky mirage of what makes 'em proud.

The apocalypse is now
toss your shoes and blister your feet
to the endless bonfire of chance,
along this road your maker you'll meet.
The apocalypse is now
so give me despair and glory
gimme crepuscular rays and dehydration
burnt chapters to end each story.

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Received a critique
on Apocalypse from @weirdelf
"It is slower and caused by Corporations. Perhaps I missed the metaphor."
08 Thu

Received a critique
on Apocalypse from @alidzain
"Nice one, bro.keep up the good work. Alid"
07 Wed

Received a critique
on Apocalypse from @Ian.T
"I said to you in PM that to talk of religion or politics is not good but there are some aspects that can be written about without causing harsh debates, Good Luck, The end is Nigh, Yours Sparrow xx I saw four riders All…"
07 Wed

Received a critique
on Apocalypse from @Barbara Writes
"It's coming one day revolutionaries all ready here. Apocalypse destine to appear. who will stand in the wake of it"
07 Wed

Received a critique
on Apocalypse from @IKnowNoBox
"Crashes, and Gong, and all.. it has the attitude of Slam Poetry. But without the dut.. dut cadence. I am reminded of an ongoing series of Haiku I write with a person on another site. "Satanic" Haiku. Thanks for sharing…"
07 Wed

Posted a poem
Apocalypse
"The apocalypse is tomorrow"
Open thread 24 lines
February 2014
25 Tue

Received a critique
on CAMPSITE from @swamp-witch
"That sounds great to me."
19 Wed

Received a critique
on CAMPSITE from @swamp-witch
"hey Doom! I really like the way you've contrasted your solitude with the groups and couples of other campers. Something tells me when out camping in Australia, people don't just "see" koalas, particularly at night. Just…"
18 Tue

Critiqued
"Winter" by @alidzain
"Try 'shares a lovers kiss' or another single syllabic synonym. : )"
17 Mon

Posted a poem
CAMPSITE
"Cicadas’ white noise"
Open thread 47 lines
16 Sun

Critiqued
"Winter" by @alidzain
"I enjoy how each stanza addresses different elements of winter; the way it edges in with cold winds effecting the amount of daylight and covering the streets in its ferociousness. Here's a few things that I think need a…"
16 Sun

Critiqued
"Love is......" by @alidzain
"I'm just going to add that my aim while commenting people's poetry is to be straight forward and blunt - if I like something I will tell you, however if something doesn't work I'm not going to gloss over it. I will alwa…"
16 Sun

Received a critique
on COOGEE from @wesley snow
"Everyone here knows it, but I don't like verso libre. I like this. I wouldn't change but one thing- "the jade zebra fish dart out" (you need an "s" after "dart(s)). (that's it.) Ah, and it's blue because of the reflecti…"
15 Sat

Critiqued
"Silent Enemy" by @redbaronj
"I enjoyed the immediacy of the first line and how it plonks you somewhat in the midst of the action. I'm not sure however you've given us enough information about this 'silent enemy' for that phrase to be anything more…"
15 Sat

Posted a poem
COOGEE
"Where do the oceans go?"
Open thread 36 lines
13 Thu

Posted a poem
BESIDE YOUR LIMBS
"As the moments rustle on"
Open thread 35 lines
09 Sun

Critiqued
"Let us hear their call" by @raj
"The format is very digestible and I enjoyed it thoroughly, but I wonder if you could let the poem be just a touch more ambiguous through the first stanzas - I could feel it was about the flowers the second I read bloom…"
09 Sun

Critiqued
"Love is......" by @alidzain
"woops it double posted."
09 Sun

Critiqued
"Love is......" by @alidzain
"While I appreciate the rhyming structure, adelicate choice of words, the content and format comes across as cliche and frankly over done. Rainer Maria Rilke says in his "Letters to a Young Poet" that love is a topic too…"
09 Sun

Critiqued
"insentient" by @eightmenout
"however I think they'd be stronger as metaphors. for example: "A pattern sprayed across the wall from the invisible brush of a painter gone lazy with achievement." or "to be outlined with chalk a game of hopscotch."…"
09 Sun

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Today I Don't Feel So Good
"Today I don't feel so good,"
Open thread 40 lines
June 2013
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Mud
"Mud on the belly of the rainbow serpent"
Open thread 43 lines
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potential
"There used to me"
Open thread 49 lines
11 Tue

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To My Friends
"Brothers and sisters of this blood path"
Open thread 24 lines
11 Tue

First critique offered
on "which" by @ida
04 Tue

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To Meet A Mountain
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To Meet A Mountain
"Blue skies to turn white bones brittle"
Open thread 32 lines
04 Tue

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Hip hop, psychedelics, meditation, peering over the cliff, staring at vast arrays of trees, feeling ecstatic, feeling lost, feeling young, feeling wise, feeling stupid.

Location: Victoria, Australia, AUS

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Rumi and the Sufi Mystics

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on Apocalypse from @weirdelf

on Apocalypse from @alidzain

on Apocalypse from @Ian.T

on Apocalypse from @Barbara Writes

on Apocalypse from @IKnowNoBox

on CAMPSITE from @swamp-witch

on CAMPSITE from @swamp-witch

"Winter" by @alidzain

"Winter" by @alidzain

"Love is......" by @alidzain

on COOGEE from @wesley snow

"Silent Enemy" by @redbaronj

"Let us hear their call" by @raj

"Love is......" by @alidzain

"Love is......" by @alidzain

"insentient" by @eightmenout

on "which" by @ida

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