CCfire

Member since March 26, 2011

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if despair had a name

Posted Jul 20, 2011 · 25 lines · 3 critiques

if he brings a midnight poem he's written
will i let him read it
will we read it a few times
out loud, as we have in the past
and if he shoots like a rocket
into the forest, igniting the fire
as he has in the past
will i want to see him again

because his voice
lifts the gray from flowers
because he says i swell and
break the silence within him

i have carried him
sleep-quiet and placed his

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broken body in the arms of aphrodite
to let the shadows fall away
so i could see his heart
resembled mine

yet i want to ask him
when will i know enough
to stand still

to find our truth, love
and all the nonsensical things
before it's lost
in the maelstrom of consequence

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"Postmodern yellow brick road" by @weirdelf
"I think you gave a new slant to 'we're off to see the wizard' in this and perhaps it's just what the old film needed lol a weirdelf twist :)"
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"Left handed" by @weirdelf
"Methinks you protest too much Jess lol...but if it's any consolation, the majority of right handers are dictators....in other words they use a machine not their hands lol joke :P"
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"The Corporate Front at the White House" by @Breakinglogic
"I love the content of this and the voice speaking as it tells it the way most ordinary people see the government and the way society is heading. The one nitpick is that is is very wordy, and I think in some places that…"
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"The Way Of The Past" by @William Saint George
"I think what Jess said is relevant..there are some images there but it has no cohesive story to it, if feels like fragments placed together and there is nothing of the author within the poem itself, it doesn't lend itse…"
22 Fri

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"The House On The Hill" by @Timbo
"Reminds me so much of The Notebook movie...and how some just can't let each other go...and are devoted..I notice the syllable count makes it flow unevenly but it was such a delightful story I didn't really care."
21 Thu

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"Bliss" by @weirdelf
"Tongue in cheek elf cos the main poem is the last half, the rest is the lingering apathy of us Aussies in Winter..but that last stanza rocks."
21 Thu

Received a critique
on if despair had a name from @raj
"Yeah...you are right about it. Chez.."
20 Wed

Received a critique
on if despair had a name from @raj
"i loved the feeling of despair expressed so very vividly in this write... do you thing "i have cradled him" would read better?..just a wee bit of suggestion..."
20 Wed

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if despair had a name
"if he brings a midnight poem he's written"
Open thread 25 lines
17 Sun

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on reading the leaves from @Kailashana2
"Switzerland. My mom was reared there after her parents died. Yes. If we're lucky we all have a Switzerland to love or to have loved. ~A"
17 Sun

Received a critique
on reading the leaves from @Bonitaj
"Don't think I've ever commented on your work before - but this one's prophetic title drew me in! Liked how you drew from the well of despair and yet ended off on a note of confidence and hope. Just one niggle for me is…"
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"Mesmeric Scapes" by @raj
"This made me want to be inside this painting of a day and it's characters. It immerses the reader to be right there and seeing it all unfold."
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on reading the leaves from @raj
"profound feeling expressed figuratively through coherent words..hard to pick a favorite from amongst many...."
17 Sun

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"do not read this poem!" by @Kailashana2
"lol..once I compose myself after reading Jess's comment...I must admit I got to that line and went Damn!! I like the raw aspect of it, it's something I have not seen with you as yet but knowing your writing I knew it wo…"
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on shadow puppet from @raj
"so my perception about the structure of this write was right..it certainly does justice to a dream of incoherent thoughts..."
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"the profound hollowness is very perceptible in this piece...is the random structure deliberate to express commotion of thoughts?"
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the blue crane
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About Me

About me

I began writing when I was about 16, a journal to my mother after she passed away, I put it away for a long time afterwards and only began again about 7 years ago when a marriage breakdown had me wondering about the cheapest form of therapy. It proved to me that writing it out was better than any $100 an hour psychoanalyst. I live in the beautiful city of Melbourne in the best place on earth I think but I am biased. I love to travel the globe when I can and I people watch, I write about them and how they intertwine my life. It's the only way I know how to write, keeping it real and raw is something I do because I feel you should always write what you know.

Location: Melbourne, Australia, AUS

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Bukowski

Neruda

Rumi

Gibran

Jeffers

Corso

Waldman

Kerouac

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Shark Pool (initial workshop)	(syllabus)	Shark Pool	Started 2011-05-16	Concluded

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"Postmodern yellow brick road" by @weirdelf

"Left handed" by @weirdelf

"The Corporate Front at the White House" by @Breakinglogic

"The Way Of The Past" by @William Saint George

"The House On The Hill" by @Timbo

"Bliss" by @weirdelf

on if despair had a name from @raj

on if despair had a name from @raj

on reading the leaves from @Kailashana2

on reading the leaves from @Bonitaj

"Mesmeric Scapes" by @raj

on reading the leaves from @raj

"do not read this poem!" by @Kailashana2

on shadow puppet from @raj

on shadow puppet from @raj

April 2011 — 23 poems

on "she" (since unpublished) by @Kailashana2

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