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Asher
Member since June 8, 2023
Member for 2 years, 11 months
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Broken Hearted
I looked at her eyes, adorned with joy of you
Captured a photograph of your smile, your life, so pure; so true
Yet something hidden behind her gaze seemed out of view.
A flicker of doubt, a shade of blue.
Wondering what demons fought for your smile.
But beneath your laughter were soft, sweet unspoken words
The colours blurred and the hate began to spread
Dear, you'd be disappointed
Cause the girl you once knew is dead
And from her ashes rose a soul;
Broken hearted.
Asher’s timeline
- October 2024
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16 WedReceived a critique
on Broken Hearted from @Candlewitch
"I think the changes you have made, make a tremendous difference in improvement! I like them very much! *hugs, Cat" -
15 TueReceived a critique
on Broken Hearted from @Lavender
"Hello, Asher, This is so intriguing and filled with emotion. And as brief as it is, even fewer words may be used. For example, "I looked at her eyes, captured a photograph of your smile" This implies and SHOWS me the jo…" -
15 TueReceived a critique
on Broken Hearted from @Candlewitch
"I agree with AI on the suggestion that the transition of emotional changes could be smoother. I think this poem needs work and is worth it! *best wishes, Cat" -
14 Mon
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01 TuePosted a poem
The Cruel Joke
"I don’t know how to face life and live, for I only had the chance to die" - June 2024
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08 SatAnniversary
One year of membership
- June 2023
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09 Fri
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08 ThuFirst publication
Unspoken
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08 Thu
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08 ThuJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
About Me
About me
I have recently stated writing poetry and I wanted to share my love for reading and writing, hoping to inspire people.
Location: Uk south east London
Favorite Poets
Carol Ann Duffy
Dylan Thomas
Wordsworth
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